Extra Credit Free Verse Poem: Whoosh
My soccer team
Was in a tournament,
That took place over two days.
The first day,
Saturday,
We lost and tied,
But our luck
Was about to change.
The first game Sunday,
We got off to a bad start,
The other team scored
Almost instantly.
We didn't give up there.
We went after our opponents,
Like cheetahs chasing prey.
We scored a goal,
Right after theirs,
To tie the game.
We won that game
Ten to two.
I assisted two,
Scored one.
All goals were beautiful,
Going long and far,
Whooshing into the back
Of the net.
The second game on Sunday
Was tougher than the first.
At the very beginning,
We scored a goal,
Countered
By one from them.
I scored the second,
To put us ahead,
Scoring my
First volley ever.
That game was won,
Three to one,
But we weren’t victorious
In the standings.
That doesn’t matter, though,
We gave it our best,
That is all that counts.
The poetic elements I used were a simile, visual imagery and onomatopoeia.
I used the simile “we didn’t give up there, like cheetahs chasing prey” to describe the relentlessness of our team. We wanted to win that game, because we had been having some bad luck in previous weeks.
I used the visual imagery “all goals were beautiful, going long and far, whooshing into the back of the net” to indicate the beautiful technique of the goals. There was nothing the other team could do to stop them. By including this visual imagery, the reader could feel like the were actually there, watching the goals be scored.
Finally, I used the onomatopoeia “whooshing” to emphasize the sound the powerful shots made. The whooshing effect can be created when a powerful shot hits the back of the net.
Was in a tournament,
That took place over two days.
The first day,
Saturday,
We lost and tied,
But our luck
Was about to change.
The first game Sunday,
We got off to a bad start,
The other team scored
Almost instantly.
We didn't give up there.
We went after our opponents,
Like cheetahs chasing prey.
We scored a goal,
Right after theirs,
To tie the game.
We won that game
Ten to two.
I assisted two,
Scored one.
All goals were beautiful,
Going long and far,
Whooshing into the back
Of the net.
The second game on Sunday
Was tougher than the first.
At the very beginning,
We scored a goal,
Countered
By one from them.
I scored the second,
To put us ahead,
Scoring my
First volley ever.
That game was won,
Three to one,
But we weren’t victorious
In the standings.
That doesn’t matter, though,
We gave it our best,
That is all that counts.
The poetic elements I used were a simile, visual imagery and onomatopoeia.
I used the simile “we didn’t give up there, like cheetahs chasing prey” to describe the relentlessness of our team. We wanted to win that game, because we had been having some bad luck in previous weeks.
I used the visual imagery “all goals were beautiful, going long and far, whooshing into the back of the net” to indicate the beautiful technique of the goals. There was nothing the other team could do to stop them. By including this visual imagery, the reader could feel like the were actually there, watching the goals be scored.
Finally, I used the onomatopoeia “whooshing” to emphasize the sound the powerful shots made. The whooshing effect can be created when a powerful shot hits the back of the net.